scrip treatment

this is a first draft of the script

EXT. ROOFTOP OVERLOOKING CITY

WOMAN IN RED walks towards the edge and rests along the side looking out at the city

MAN (V.O.)
She looked over Armageddon with the effortless despair you'd hear about in the pictures

MAN stands behind her, woman doesn't turn to see himbut knows he's there

MAN (V.O.)
Even now, I can smell that empowering allure of honeysuckle as if she was right in front of me

WOMAN
Enjoying the party?

MAN
Being the social puppet's not my idea of enjoyment

WOMEN
But I am?

MAN
It'd certainly explain why I couldn't take my eyes off you

Women gets out a cigarette, and turns around to look at the man

WOMAN
Don't supposed you'd have a lighter?

Man gets out a Zippo

MAN
Always have one on me

Man lights Zippo

MAN (CONT’D)
In case I get lucky

Man lights her cigarette, then puts zippo away and carrys on staring into her eyes

WOMAN
Do you like what you see?

MEN
Depends, Am I seeing the truth?

WOMAN
That's for me to know and for you to find out

Women looks down and then up inspecting Man

WOMAN (CONT’D)
Was there any other reason you chose me or am I just another target for you to aim you pistol at?

MAN
I chose you because I had to, the moment I saw your eyes, I was lost

WOMAN
I hope you left a trail of bread crumbs so you can find your way back

MAN
Would you want me to?

Man gets closer towards Woman

MAN
Or are you just saying that to make me feel better?

Man kisses Woman, she embraces him

MAN (V.O.)
Time stands still, and for that brief moment, I forget all the terrors that bestow every being from Birth to death, I forget how simple life truly is and how complicated we attempt to make it

Man holds Woman

MAN (CONT’D)
I can make you forget everything, I can make sure your life is complete, I can make sure you never feel pain again, but only if you want me to

WOMAN
I want you to

Woman gives him a small kiss

WOMAN (CONT’D)
I want you . . .

Woman gives him a long kiss

MAN (V.O.)
For that brief moment, I forget

Three quiet shots are heard, Woman looks up and then falls to Man's feet, man looks ahead and looks at his hands, one carrying a gun with a silencer, both are covered in blood, and is the body of Women, he gets out a napkin to wipe off the blood

MAN (V.O.) (CONT’D)
I forget that the only way to make sure she can never feel pain again, is to make sure she ceases to be

He then cleans the gun

MAN (V.O.) (CONT’D)
I am never sure if they are accepting their fate or if they are unaware of it, and whether the verbal foreplay is for foreplay's sake, or if they are preventing the inevitable. Maybe one day, I will get lost in someone's eyes, and I will past the point of no return, and the inevitable will be mine

He places the gun carefully in her hands, and takes her cigarette

MAN (V.O.) (CONT’D)
Most likely solution, She was hoping that somehow that she would be the one

Man smiles, takes a drag

MAN (CONT’D)
Better luck next time

He blows a kiss, and walks of

END

we will take out the kiss-blowing, as it makes the man too feminine

beginnings...

So,we've started this off by looking at a range of ideas to work with. From film noir, to men in lycra. And then we quickly banished the ideas of Superman, Antichrist, Tokyo Gore Police, Blazing Saddles, Ichi: the Killer, and all other suggestions made by Max. We eventually decided, to work between the ideas of sci-fi and film noir, this being too complicated, we went with basic neo noir. On watching clips from Blade and Sin City, we decided that the opening scene of Sin City would be less impossible than showering semi dressed teens with blood (A.K.A Gorno, which is a bad idea for a student film project, apparently), our basic plan is to use the concept of the opening scene of Sin City and expand upon it, making it so the viewer can tell we have been inspired by it but we are not perfectly replicating it.